Successful Sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, public concern has arisen about whether sports stars' salary is too enormous compared to their social contribution. From my own perspective, it is unfair for other careers with more social contributions. In this essay, I will explain both views and give reasons for my own opinion.
First of all, it is evident that the profits that a sports star earn from their career often come from their marketing values. In other words, the more they are famous and influential, the more companies and branches want them to advertise for their products. More specifically, it is a two-affair relationship: one gives the money to market their goods, one uses their fame to meet that requirement. In the second place, the career path of a sports professional is relatively short, which means their income is not stable during their life. Above all, the effort they made to become a sports star is marvellous and unbelievable, including a great deal of patience, hard-working and suffering from invasion of privacy as well.
On the other hand, many people consider sports as part of entertainment industry and assert that we are overspending our money on this leisure. To some who find no interest in sports, it is just so incomprehensible that people can be passionate about these players. Furthermore, sports industry itself is believed to be useless and make no social values as it aims at nothing but human's fun. Besides, it is undeniable that there are other careers which shoulder the responsibility for human safety and survival. However, their existence is usually neglected and some even cannot be recognised for their own devotion due to several reasons.
All things considered, I firmly believe that we are putting too much care on our own wellbeing and thus, ignore the ones that we need to be thankful for. I suggest that the government should implement effective strategies to allocate resources reasonably.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, well, first of all, in other words, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09493670886 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87116540288 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604430379747 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0753531049 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202782462329 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06750659976 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529125181229 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112157618889 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612631655108 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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