Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Although gender equation has been strongly promoted in recent years, it is undeniable that males and females are sharing differences in term of strengths and weaknesses. Some people argue that excluding one gender from certain careers can bring great benefits to the community. However, I firmly disagree with that opinion because of several reasons that I will discuss in this essay.
First of all, this important decision may strengthen the existing conflict between two genders as it expresses a clear inequation between men and women. In spite of different ability in emotional and physical performance, they should have the same opportunities to develop their own skills and experience.
Another reason for this is the variety of an environment consisting of both men and women. Due to their distinctive features, males and females can contribute different values to a career. Take technology companies as an example. Although women are often evaluated lower than men in this field, many employers try to get a certain number of female members in each department so as to promote creativity and strong bond among these sections.
Finally, it is a common belief that everyone is an unique creature so that they should be treated in different ways. The weaknesses of a group are not the ones of every members. Therefore, it seem clear that excluding male or female from a professions means ignoring the benefits of a part of people in each gender.
All things considered, I believe that we should provide everyone no matter their gender with the same opportunities so that they can create different social values.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, as to, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17045454545 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76601014066 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.116023997 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288847475781 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905938166584 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430413491323 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142506002389 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515255066106 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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