Successful Sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, many sports stars have become billionaires with their own talent. Although it is generally thought to worth their effort, some people claim that their salary is too high compared to their social contribution. In this essay, I will explain both views and clear my opinion.
First of all, the money that a sports star earn from their career often comes from their marketing value. In other words, the more they are famous, the more companies and branches want them to advertise for their products. Therefore, it is a two-affair relationship: one gives the money to market their goods, one uses their fame for that purpose. Moreover, the career path of a sports professional is quite short, which means their income is not stable during their life. In addition, the effort they made to become a sports star is marvellous and unbelievable, including a great deal of patience, hard-working and some luck as well.
On the other hand, many people consider sports as part of entertainment industry and believe that we are spending too much money on that leisure. With some who find no interest in sports, it is just quite strange that people can be so crazy with these players. Furthermore, sports industry itself is believed to be useless and make no social value as it purpose is to serve nothing but human's fun. Besides, some also think that there are other careers who worth this money more than sports professionals due to their social contribution.
To sum up, I firmly believe that all things in the world goes on the way they should do. Therefore, if a sports player can earn too much, it only means they worth it. Consequently, I personally support the idea that their salary is justified and suits what they did for the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...the way they should do. Therefore, if a sports player can earn too much, it only means...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, first of all, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5568122514 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8181395656 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235250092933 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789238797329 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651563701508 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132936085389 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665238204439 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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