There is a situation where in a number of countries, the mean of people's weight is increasing while their health level is decreasing. This essay will discuss the reasons why this problem occurs and the possible solutions to overcome this problem.
There are some reasons why this problem occurs. And I personally think that the root of this problem is the rapid advancement technology. Firstly, the rapid advancement technology has helped people to get what they want in an easy way. Thus, people no longer need to move or do a lot of efforts to get whatever they want. Consequently, the calories that they burn become less and they become fatter. For instance, previously people need to go outside to shop for groceries and cook to get the food that they want. But ever since the inventions of a lot of online delivery applications, people can easily order from those applications without requiring much effort. Secondly, rapid advancement of technology has changed people's hobbies to be something that involve less outdoor and physical activities. This is because, the newest technology inventions can present more interesting entertainment for people which is more interesting than outdoor and physical activities. As a result, people become more unhealthy and fatter than before. For example, in the past kids and their parents love doing sports or going for camping in the outdoor. But nowadays kids and their parents only love playing sport video games or watching camping vlog from the internet. This made them to do less physical activities which result to the increase of their average weight.
However, there are some probable solutions for this problem. Firstly, doctors and medical personnel should educate public about the importance of doing physical activities and being healthy. By educating and promoting about this, people will be reminded about this matter. Consequently, they will change their habits to involve more physical activities. Secondly, technology corporations should invent interesting entertainment tool which involve a lot of physical movements. By following people's entertainment trend, this invention will be able to attract a lot of people which will result to them doing more physical activities while also being entertained. For instance, Nintendo has done this in around 2010 where they found Nintendo Wii which involve its players to move while playing games. Consequently, many gamers started to do more physical activities which they never did before.
In conclusion, the increasing weight and the decreasing health level of people in a lot of countries is mainly caused by technology, where technology has helped people to get what they want easily, and has changed people's hobbies to involve less physical activities. However, there are some possible solutions for this problem such as doctors and medical personnel should educate public about health and physical activity matters, and technology corporations should invent entertainment tool with a lot of physical movements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an easy way" with adverb for "easy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...has helped people to get what they want in an easy way. Thus, people no longer need to move or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 1615.20841683 158% => OK
No of words: 475.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38105263158 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77161232914 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427368421053 0.561755894193 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7145368945 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.24 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212895625897 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681105364362 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651181120837 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155807075363 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407077614517 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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