In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels health and fitness is decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

The proportion of overweight people has been increasing nowadays. This would lead to having unhealthy and unfit people which would suffer from the associated disease like diabetes and heart attacks. I believe that the increase in obesity is mainly because of our sedentary lifestyle which needs to be addressed before reaching to serious conditions for an individual and a government as a whole.

The number of obese people, especially those in developed countries, has increased because of their inactive lifestyle and consumption of fast food. Take Australia as an example. Full-time employees are required to work 40 hours per week, most of which are behind desk. Employees often work overtime to meet the deadlines, causing them to sacrifice their leisure time. Consequently, a fewer number of people would go to gym to exercise. Another issue is attributed to the ubiquity of fast food restaurants, such as McDonald’s and KFC, inducing people to dine in them instead of eating healthy food. Therefore, it can be seen that more people have become unfit and the number of associated healthy issues has increased.

Modern people should consider appropriate amount of exercises and sport activities in their timetable if they like to become fitter and healthier. One practical solution would be regular walking for instance 30 minutes per day. Instead of using private cars, use bicycle for their commuting. Moreover, consuming home-made food instead of fast food would result in less fat and fitter body.

In conclusion, the inactive lifestyle of modern people and using convenience food are held the responsible for the raise in obesity which can be addressed by doing exercises and eating healthy food and vegetables.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32727272727 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79355574833 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6431524383 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115257468533 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405534352266 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277345552642 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0709966486538 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178881028202 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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