In some countries children are often told that they can achieve anything If they try hard enough.
The last decades have seen enormous changes in the way of people's lives are affected by the advancement in technological fields like as computer and internet. There are those who say that every person can achieve anything after doing work hard however, others believe that many negative effects grow in children life,If they do not work hard. This essay will examine the positive aspects and drawbacks of this contentious arguments and provide an overall opinion.
From an overall perspective, there are various disadvantages of doing work hard. Firstly, If chidern try to do study hard, they can get 1st position in class. This mean that when they will focus on their study, they might get better job in short period of time without wasting their crucial time. A further point in favour of this merit could be that Unlike in the past children's used to complete their assignments in few weeks but these days, In the era of modernization they complete their homework on computer in a day with the help of internet.
Despite these arguments,there are various disadvantages. Fundamentally, Unless anybody who study hard, they would fail in real exam. The result of this phenomenon might be that they would feel lonely, isolated and alienated which in turn leads to personal problems such as depression and alcoholism. The decision as to whether every person should focus on their work in order to completing their future dreams must be seen in the context of the entire society.
To Conclude, this is a topic which is very relevant to the contemporary society. Taking to above in to account, it would appear that there are more advantages than cons. If children spend more time on study, it would be desirable for them.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , If
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... time. A further point in favour of this merit could be that Unlike in the past c...
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Line 10, column 24, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...nternet. Despite these arguments,there are various disadvantages. Fundamentall...
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Line 10, column 314, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...depression and alcoholism. The decision as to whether every person should focus on their work...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, as to, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99310344828 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62853634736 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593103448276 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5144148696 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215836087843 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678733277013 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811336675561 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119612773858 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681872241006 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , If
...y negative effects grow in children life,If they do not work hard. This essay will ...
^^^
Line 6, column 247, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...udy, they might get better job in short period of time without wasting their crucial time. A f...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... time. A further point in favour of this merit could be that Unlike in the past c...
^^
Line 10, column 24, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...nternet. Despite these arguments,there are various disadvantages. Fundamentall...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 314, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...depression and alcoholism. The decision as to whether every person should focus on their work...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, as to, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99310344828 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62853634736 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593103448276 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5144148696 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215836087843 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678733277013 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811336675561 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119612773858 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681872241006 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.