"Some countries encourage students to have part-time jobs and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views."
In recent years, the issue of whether students should take part-time jobs remains a matter for debate. While there are some benefits of working during school, I would argue that it is better to concentrate on studying.
The option to start working during school is attractive for several reasons. Many young people want to earn money as soon as possible, so they can become independent that they will be able to pay for the rent and cover their needs. In terms of their career, students who work part-time may have better job opportunities in the future. Because, in this way, they can be able to gain real experiences and practical skills related to their chosen profession, while employers always look for candidates who understand the work environment. Therefore students who have plenty of experiences will be more competitive in the job market after graduating.
On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to concentrate on their major. Firstly, while doing a part-time job, they have a busy schedule and they will get less time for study and themselves. As a result, they will not have time to rest, they can feel exhausted and their study will be affected. In addition, sometimes getting high wages from part-time jobs can distract them from learning, because the more money they earn the more they think about it. Then they can not have good enough qualification required for the job despite the fact that they may have plenty of experiences.
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against working during school, but I believe that focus on studying is more significant than earning money when we are students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...es who understand the work environment. Therefore students who have plenty of experiences...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96797153025 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62015011232 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548042704626 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4128649775 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.384615385 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15056550245 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681979394739 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525316404557 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923741209871 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443065424246 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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