Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
Encouraging young people to work as part-time workers is becoming increasingly debatable. While other nations believe that it is necessary to encourage teenage people to do part-time work and think it is a good thing, others disagree with this argument. This essay will discuss why having part-time jobs for teenagers has its benefits but why its drawbacks are ultimately superior.
Having part-time employment is certainly an effective way to utilize spare time for young people. It would give them a great opportunity to get real-world experiences as they would meet and work together with professional workers. Next, they would obviously get paid which they could use for supporting their living expenses. They then eventually could improve their personal skills that they get from this part-time job. Working as part-time employees in Indonesia’s car manufacturer, for instance, the teenagers not only will get a salary, but they also would learn how to communicate well with other members and how to make a good decision making in certain cases. Therefore, because of its benefits, nowadays more and more countries have been trying to encourage their young people to work as part-time employees.
But other countries think that it is completely unnecessary for teenagers to have part-time jobs. They believe that young people should be encouraged to focus on their studies. They argue that doing part-time work means that their young citizens would be unsuccessful in their studies as the would be difficult to manage their times between working and studying. As an example, when they are in final exam day, they obviously need to prepare more for their exam, as they are working in their companies or places they would not be able to study hard for preparing their exams. This difficulty could lead them failure of their exams. From this reason and example, some countries do not want to encourage their young people to have part-time jobs, moreover, in specific countries, they are strictly prohibited to work as part-time workers.
Encouraging young people to have part-time jobs is still controversial. This essay discussed why working as part-time workers can improve teenagers’ personal skills and get paid but why it can be such a difficult thing to do, especially in managing time between working and studying. In my opinion, teenagers should not be encouraged to have part-time jobs.
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...rohibited to work as part-time workers. Encouraging young people to have part-ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27720207254 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78526808907 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466321243523 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6388554217 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26449872968 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122251578778 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926102233491 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211529602845 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651262466257 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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