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In some countries a few people earn extremely high salary some people think this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control saleries and limit the amount People can.-Discuss both point of view and give your opinion

Essay topics: In some countries a few people earn extremely high salary some people think this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control saleries and limit the amount People can.

-Discuss both point of view and give your opinion

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In today's rapidly changing world,people have different view about saleries lavels in several country.Therefore,some People in society claim that high saleries is good for nation.Where as other insist that government should control the high saleries.This essay will discuss both point of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

There are manifold point to shore up the former view.First of all,high salaries people pay more taxes as compared to low salaries person which is help to boost our economy.Another side for this argument is that high salaries talented person should be rewarded with salaries.Secondly,having a higher salary is sign of country wealth as results we give our nation identity in the world.Thirdly,high salary stops people to working in foreign country.For instance,nowadays lots of youngest migrate to Canada ,UK,USA,London,and many other foreign countries for earning more money and education.

On the other hand,there are numerous point can be mentioned to endorse the latter view.To initiate with, limiting saleries would bring more equality.Therefore,it can be disherting for some to receive a low salary and other higher as a result increasing the gape between rich people and poor people and it will effect our economy.In addition,limiting high salaries will means more funding allocate for public services which will beneficial for all people in society.
To recapitulate,it is true that high saleries increase superior and inferior among people.However,after analyzing both side of controversy,I firmly believe that in this compititive era any person deserve high and low salaries according to this experience and skill.

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first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70967741935 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.71509947376 2.80592935109 132% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604838709677 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 20.2975951904 305% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.806850774 49.4020404114 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 354.0 106.682146367 332% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.0 20.7667163134 299% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 38.0 7.06120827912 538% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.01903807615 638% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424726593143 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237486635041 0.084324248473 282% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705065067212 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237486635041 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705065067212 0.056905535591 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.5 13.0946893788 279% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -8.37 50.2224549098 -17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.8 11.3001002004 264% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.73 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.61 8.58950901804 135% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 9.78957915832 281% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 10.1190380762 265% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.7795591182 278% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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