In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, many issued about the medical problem are caused by junk food, and the government has the solution to change the human habit in consuming junk food by including extra cash. However, both parties have their reason to the argument whether expensive junk food will give more beneficial for human or not.

To begin with, the communities, especially who live in the metropolitan, are compelled to be work instantly as possible. There is not enough time to reserving of a meal for people who work in the busy field. One thing that can be minimized is when they buy junk food. This food opens the solution to cut-down time. For example, the businessman has a tidy schedule, sometimes, he forgets to get a breakfast in the morning, as the way to the work, people can visit fast food outlets such as MCD, KFC, and etc.

On the other hand, Many consumptions of fast food will increase the chance of health degradation, and this problem will be the government role. The tax will realize the human no to spend too much money to eat junk food, especially in the free day, because the massed shall have time to make a meal. Hopefully, by the tax, the medical problem caused by the junk food decrease to a significant number. There is some research about junk food which the food content is not as healthy as fresh food. This statement is supported by the data about the minimum number of nutrient and high consumption will bring to obesity.

In conclusion, fast food will provide human to always eat in the business day. But, this kind of meal shall be decreased in consumption because many medical histories are caused by fast food. And the tax has the role to realize the human about this danger.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...sit fast food outlets such as MCD, KFC, and etc. On the other hand, Many consumptions...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...nt role. The tax will realize the human no to spend too much money to eat junk foo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66112956811 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46357107861 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514950166113 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7503692598 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267113490613 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998120411384 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492525843429 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169223187474 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584100872128 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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