In some countries, parents expect children to spend a long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?
In this day and age, parents are becoming more and more strict about how they educate their children. They want their kids to spend most of the time studying rather than enjoy free time. From my point of view, it not only has a positive impact on children’s future but also the society.
There are several valid reasons why dedicating more hours on studying could bring enormous benefits to children. To begin with, if children have a qualified academic qualification, they could have a high-paying occupation in the future. For example, doctor, engineer, scientist are considered stable jobs with ideal salaries. However, these professions required excellent academic results, so only the people having suitable qualifications could work in these kinds of positions. Moreover, when children spend most of their time on attaining knowledge, they might have less time playing video games. As a result, they could have less risk of getting eye problems like short-sightedness, long-sightedness.
Moreover, the increasing number of well-educated children has a positive impact on the society that they live in. In fact, the significance of technology is accompanied by negative effects for children, especially on the internet. As kids spend a long time studying in and after school, they could have less time using social media then avoid being exposed to bad influences. Therefore they could have less opportunities to become criminals and commit illegal acts. As a result, social stability might be protected. Furthermore, individual success is associated with the development of a nation. If children have a good occupation, they could help the government and local authorities take care of the local people. For instance, in this epidemic period, doctors and nurses are giving enormous contributions to the healthcare systems.
In conclusion, studying well and hard could help children have good jobs in the future, therefore not only improve their own life but also bring numerous benefits to society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40634920635 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96580664749 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584126984127 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0658396993 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.6111111111 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382645776084 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110506038368 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915281435682 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224836073387 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865525425664 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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