In some countries, parents expect children to spend a long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?
The expectation from parents of longer studying time that students should have in and after school become ubiquitous all over the world. From my perspective, this trend is harmful to children and society although some people argue that it drives the world to become knowledge-based.
The expanding learning hours have damaged the next generation’s comprehensive thrive as it deprives the time children spend on social activities. In the modern society where academic pressure from schools and parents overwhelms children, they have to devote a considerable amount of time and effort to studying in school and at home. They have no time to promote their social ability, which they need to learn from interacting and playing with peers in their spare time, in order to equip themselves with personal skills that are essential in their adulthood. Without the opportunities to mingle with friends, young children may become alienated and difficult to work with. In this case, it is hard for the young generation to horn well-rounded personal qualities.
It is argued that society will develop faster with generations who are excel in academe and full of knowledge. However, the reality may be the opposite situation that the social development will be slowed as citizens are unsatisfied with their lives. People would be unhappy or even have resentment if their parents ask them to spend their precious childhood calculating complex mathematical problems or memorizing famous poems. Those who hold grudges are reluctant to work hard to contribute to the community when they grow up and are released from strict parental supervision. This is detrimental to the advancement of a country if the younger generations lack positive motivation.
In conclusion, the upbringing of the children and the prosperity of society would be damaged when they are forced to increase the already unbearably long time to focus on study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: excelled
...develop faster with generations who are excel in academe and full of knowledge. Howev...
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Line 8, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unbearably long time to focus on study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32131147541 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89598597178 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56393442623 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4680292827 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.846153846 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305859515782 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103250606266 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861970057978 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186525209782 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650757940193 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.