In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.

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In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.

Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get a job or go on a trip for some time before university life. While I accept that there are drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that it is better to take a gap year to work or travel.
The option to get a job or travel straight after school is disadvantageous to some extent. The main shortcoming is that a number of graduating students who choose this option may start their professional careers later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or go on a trip after high school. As a result, these students might get a promoted later in their careers. In addition, travelling costs a great deal. If students travel right after high school, they may not earn enough money and have to ask their parents for financial help. Therefore, it is not advisable that people should take this option.
On the other hand, it seems to me that high school seniors should choose to work or travel for a period of time because of some undeniable advantages. First, working and travelling are both good chances for them to gain some valuable experience. My sister, for example, travel to Tokyo during her gap year. By spending time in Tokyo, she was able to hear, speak, read and write the Japan language constantly which gave her countless opportunities to improve Japan skills. Second, taking a year out helps young graduates clarify their study and career future. In other words, they can do various jobs without long-term commitment, and discover what might be right for in terms of a future career path.
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages to young people who start working or travelling prior to beginning their university studies, although this decision has some notable disadvantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, as a result, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86046511628 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66917458574 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543604651163 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.157683458 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8888888889 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485215046752 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16025620278 0.084324248473 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177560149686 0.0667982634062 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34038332447 0.151304729494 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.320117799264 0.056905535591 563% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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