In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think it is a good idea. Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
According to some recent surveys, youth has tendency to do an extra-work during studying progress. However, others oppose that they should combine their education with a job. These two options are controversial ones. In my opinion, this phenomenon has both advantages and disadvantages due to following points.
From the positive perspective, students are capable of getting many benefits from working after school. First of all, working after school stimulates them to learn how to arrange time logically. From my everyday experience and observation, it is an important benefit for a student. Secondly, it helps them be aware of the importance of the money, which teaches how to manage their budget in a reasonable way. They must be responsible for the way they spend money.
However, everything has two sides and so does this problem. To begin with, spending too much time working after school has negative influences on feedback at school. To be specific, it takes less time to study at home than usual, which can lead to bad results at school. Next, working overtime means no free time, no parties with friends. I am conviced students isolate themselves from some social relationships, so they are able to be under pressure.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that students have difficulties in balancing study and work. Personally, studying is the most important to them when they are still studying at school, hence, they should highly concentrate on it at this time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, first of all, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06530612245 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78889330456 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6855971219 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.5625 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3125 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0841259111881 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279501446588 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307455843241 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0584599257859 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300252792049 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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