Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
There is no denying that stars involed in media and sports have received increasing admiration from the youth. They show admiration for these media and sports celebrities who set role mode. This phenomenon may have both good and bad development, so let me examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.
From a positive perspective, this tendency has desirable influences on young individuals. In fact,they are able to get various valuable lessons from their idols. To be specific, they deepen an understanding of how their stars overcome difficulties to achieve success and fame, which becomes a source of motivation and inspiration for them to make their dreams come true. For example, as far as I am concerned, the youth becomes more self-confident to perform in front of many people or hard-working to do exercises for a good health and standard body. A good example is Kylian Mbappe Lottin , whose idol is Cristiano Rinaldo, becomes the youngest football player of World Cup 2018.
However, some of famous stars have tendency to wear sex-arousing costumes to attract audiences' attention and become well-known, therefore, youth people have a misunderstanding that scandal is the only cause to become famous rapidly. In terms of sports, usage of violence in football is dramatically increasing, so violence will be used more and more by youngsters as a consequence of watching aggressive matches on television set.
In conclusion, although some has some bad effects to the youth, personally, its benefits overweight its drawbacks as they will filter out all the negative characteristics and opt for good traits in famous figures, which means that they don't blindly mimic.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26765799257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02166162194 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646840148699 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0107961808 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.818181818 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192057383611 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696529622752 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514412247607 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101726879868 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549056774602 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.