In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, young people in some countries are encouraged to work or travel for a year between after graduating from high school and starting to study at the university. Some of the advantages will be discussed before the disadvantages are drawn.
First of all, going traveling after graduating from high school can refresh teenagers' minds. Surveys found that students who go traveling will be able to think outside the box after they come back home. As an example for this, one student is lazy, but after coming home from the vacation, he will feel excited to study because there is no load in their mind. Another point is that students can get some new experience in working that they will not get from schools or universities. It has been proven by some experts that working gives more experience to people rather than continue studying at the university. As a result, people will have more experience in doing business.
It might be true that going to work or traveling brings out benefits to students' lives. Nevertheless, it also brings out disadvantage to students. Moreover, studying is more preferable for students to have a better future. Firstly, students who come back from the working field or traveling to continue studying, mostly feel lazy because they need to re-adapt with the studying environment, which is very hard to do. Recent studies show that most people are comfortable in their own journey, thus they will forget anything and only adapt with the traveling. The result is students will get a bad score in their test because they do not want to study maximally. Secondly, students will not have any degree from university if they do not continue to study. It has obvious consequences, such as it will be hard to apply to the company to work. Therefore, students must open their own businesses.
After analyzing both sides of the arguments, going traveling or working can refresh students' minds, but the importance of studying at the university for students' better future is irreplaceable. It seems to me that it is better to continue to study in university, because most universities allow students to do the part-time job, hence the students can also get the experience while they are studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97050938338 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69921136801 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493297587131 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7685406966 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5789473684 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262111154772 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914876578634 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977958729163 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222390411449 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150694475517 0.056905535591 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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