In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Essay topics:

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some cultures, children are taught that they can even achieve stars if they pursue harder. Although, this message can boost child's motovation but it may also have negative effect on their mental health, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

The major factor behind parent's message is to make children believe in thei hardwork so that they push their motivation. Sometimes children just think that the task may be vague, and such encouragement will lift up children's ability to work harder with not giving up attitude. For instance, out-performing one of my friend seemed so arduous for me, when I was in grade eight. If my parents had not told me that I could even win her if i study well, I wouldnot have been so proud on result day. So, the support of parents can definitely make children persistent and will have bright future in the long run.

On the other hand, trying hard might build a pressure on children to perform more than his abilities. As we all hve different abilities, it might affect children's mental health that he is not enough. Further, this lowers the confidence of child because of which he might not be able to perform even simplest of tasks. Due to this reasons, children often fall into bad peers as they cannot share feelings with their parents. Thus, the message might put an unnecessry pressure to a child due to which it may harm his mental health.

To conclude, the teachings by parents can help children to be perseverent for their goal whereas, it can be harmful if they are given unwanted stress without understanding their abilities.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80363636364 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53854647029 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607272727273 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.3127085856 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.615384615 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303120746312 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107397781367 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848619788143 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183134682008 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485810265551 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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