There is often debate about the issue as to whether children would be a career prospect as well as fulfilling the dream of high-salary jobs in the future by trying their best has remained a source of controversy. Personally, I firmly believe that it has both pros and cons for youngsters that choose this direction. I would write up a few causes to clarify in this essay below.
On the one hand, Taking some efforts as much as possible will reach advantageous merits for several radical reasons. Firstly, It can motivate and inspire them to overcome some hardships and pursue their interests, maybe a tertiary education or make their possibilities, this helps to commit themselves to international organizations. Secondly, It can help them develop a positive mentality and a certain patience when conducting research and making a clear distinction. Furthermore, It can make them focused and determined from the start of their journey, simultaneously, They may alter some unwanted characteristics and give some right decisions. By these factors, I am also convinced that Trying hard to a certain level will bring many beneficial values.
On the other hand, This notion also keeps a counterproductive direction through some unwanted reasons. It may mislead them into spending too much time and effort on tasks in which hard work plays little role or where luck and chance are more important. This can lead to an insufficient attitude and go in a negative direction. Also, It may cause delusion and disappointment when they fail to achieve their unrealistic ideas, Giving rise to trying hard without practicing the optimum of the brain which could lead to wrong decisions. Another impact can not be ignored that related to moral values and unethical behaviors in order to meet those ambitious goals or are likely to be a failure when they don't achieve them right from the first challenges.
In conclusion, I advocate the notion that Trying hard enough keeps a significant role and Youngsters can reach career promotion that completely depends on the way they choose and it would bring how to be out-competing merits for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09142857143 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95686541142 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582857142857 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.3234645833 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.285714286 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2584092972 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746874240531 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410896881833 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140007640014 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256631204503 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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