In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Nowadays children are taught to study hard to achieve goals they set. In several nations, they are suggested to work hard in order to obtain everything they want. I believe that there are both advantages and disadvantages of this method.
To nurture their children, parents might apply a number of approaches. First benefit could be its contribution to the improvement the sense of independence of their offspring. For instance, if children perform their tasks in trial and error, they, without doubt, would find a way to accomplish it successfully. Moreover, they commence to value the results they obtained which is attributed to be grown up with good nurture. Therefore, parents would be less worried about the behavior of their children as they attempt to achieve their goals without parental intervention. Another advantage could be that in addition to hardworking, children would go above and beyond.
Conversely, applying such method might lead to unintended consequences. By pushing children to work hard may make them feel depressed even if their targets are achievable. For instance, constantly pushed youngsters would have insufficient spare time for entertainment which is important in their development. Hard-working may require an independent performance that children may not be able to obtain support from their relatives which makes them feel loneliness. There is no evidence that by trying hard anything could be obtained at once, and therefore, several failures would, for sure, have adverse impact on their self-confidence.
In conclusion, although there are benefits of conveying messages to children about trying hard, parents ought not to push them to avoid psychological problems of their children. I believe that moral supports by relatives would definitely contributes to greatest results of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'contribute'
Suggestion: contribute
... supports by relatives would definitely contributes to greatest results of children.
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Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the greatest'.
Suggestion: to the greatest
... relatives would definitely contributes to greatest results of children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, may, moreover, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5231316726 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02553897606 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5871886121 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.875616034 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270530717279 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100922060387 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690827699352 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199307605508 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886528296688 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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