In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Nowadays, in some nations, young generation are inculcated that they can accomplish everything as long as they work hard for it. This essay will now delve into both pros and cons of this belief.
Through this advice, children are encouraged to possess qualities of being industrious and self-confident. The suggestion emphasizes that the only way leading to success is through hard work, which lays down a foundation for kids’ attitudes and behaviors later. A striking example is that Japanese people were taught to be hard working whenever they do something in their childhood, which triggers them to work relentlessly in order to have a promotion. Moreover, when youngsters are more likely to believe in the relationship between perseverance and triumph, they may also develop their self-esteem in the long term. This is because whenever they succeed, they will feel proud and worth for extreme efforts and time that they have invested into.
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks when people work so hard for their achievements. Obviously, besides high productivity at work in Japan, the rate of suicide there due to stress-related workload is also the highest in the world, for instance. Since Japanese employees are too ambitious with their goals and thus desire to work as much as possible according to the advice, they possibly do not take care of themselves or have free time. Consequently, they are unable to balance between their life and work, resulting in depression and suicide. Additionally, there are some cases when individuals may not be successful with their targets despite their dramatic persistence for it. These people might end up feeling disappointed with themselves and abilities, which could cause them not to have motivation for anything any longer.
To conclude, there are benefits and disadvantages of forming a connection between success and assiduousness for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3125 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90610618668 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585526315789 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9866592651 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.357142857 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195168201648 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727126591244 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561853680817 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137823036268 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511641903107 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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