Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which do you think is a better educational system?
In today’s world, most countries have shown great concern about education systems. When this issue comes into view, there exist many conflicting opinions. Some systems require students to concentrate on some fixed subjects when they are 15 years old. Meanwhile, others force students to study a large number of subjects until they leave their schools. Both of the views have their own merits which require careful consideration.
To begin with, some educational systems force their students to study some specific subjects when they are at the age of 15. One benefit which this type of systems can bring is that students following this method can have expert knowledge in their subjects to participate in many competitions of knowledge over the world. For example, in Vietnam, students in Lam Son gifted high school are divided into nine major subjects. Consequently, many students there won international prizes in their major subjects. Therefore, students conforming to this system are able to achieve great studying success in their lives.
On the other hand, other systems oblige students to learn many sorts of subjects until leaving school. The most frequent plus side of this educational method is that students abiding by these systems could have a foundation regarding to many fields in life. For this reason, they are able to get a job easily in the future. In reality, there are mandatory subjects which are taught in the US high schools such as: Science, Mathematics, English and Social Science. As a consequence of this, there is a high proportion of students graduating US high schools got admitted to multinational companies worldwide. As this example has shown, the positive impact of this kind of education system cannot be denied.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that the educational system relies on certain subjects, as well as others dependent on many subjects, has particular advantages which are undisputed. However, from my perspective, I am of the view that the education system with many different subjects is better than others with specific subjects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, for example, kind of, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27299703264 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74426652789 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543026706231 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0370194673 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7222222222 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422358030606 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140438234736 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109894098495 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269403491259 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371755657255 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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