Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree

The question of whether every child should receive musical instrument instruction has sparked debates among educationalists. This essay asserts the immense value of music education, encompassing cognitive development, emotional expression, and personal growth.
I firmly agree that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. Engaging in music education enhances cognitive development in numerous ways. Learning an instrument requires discipline, focus, and problem-solving skills, fostering improved memory and attention span. Scientific research has also shown that musical training correlates with enhanced mathematical abilities and language skills. By integrating music into the curriculum, children receive a comprehensive approach to learning, empowering them with valuable cognitive tools that extend beyond the realms of music itself.
Furthermore, music education nurtures emotional expression and personal growth. Playing a musical instrument allows children to channel their emotions and creativity into melodies and harmonies. This artistic outlet encourages self-discovery and boosts self-confidence, empowering children to explore their unique identities. Moreover, engaging with music provides a means for emotional catharsis and stress relief, fostering emotional intelligence and resilience. By developing a deeper understanding of emotions, children cultivate empathy and compassion, essential qualities for building harmonious relationships and promoting social cohesion.
In conclusion, I strongly advocate for providing musical instrument education to every child. The cognitive benefits, emotional expression, and personal growth fostered by music education are invaluable, equipping children with the skills and qualities necessary for holistic development and future success.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether every child should receive musical inst...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 237.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.70042194093 5.12529762239 131% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16672218472 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628691983122 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.1 1.60771543086 131% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1624888447 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.428571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9285714286 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215302763539 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971103896257 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143352712752 0.0667982634062 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141640698868 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640557705968 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 12.94 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.28 12.4159519038 171% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.89 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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