Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experien

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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.
What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

It's true that there are many parents purchase numerous toys to their children. However, this becomes an arguable situation - whether or not children own plenty of playthings. On the face of it, the advantages seem most obvious, but could there be a downside to this phenomenon too?

Some people consider that it's lucky of children have many toys. Interesting things to play with stimulate many positives in the young boy or girl, such as optimum brain development, hand-eye coordination and color recognition, apart from the simple joy of playing. Moreover, more toys now are designed to be educational as well as fun. Through concerned selection of toys, it can speed up children's acquisition of numbers or the alphabet.

Nevertheless, there are some people hold that it's detrimental of giving kids multiple toys. For one, wealthy parents might spoil their kids by showering their son or daughter with toys, resulting in a negative effect on their children's character. For another, a kid's consideration span may suffer if he/she is surrounded by many tempting objects, so that they can't focus on any one game for a decent length of time before distracted. On the social side, older children may become targets of envy from classmates, if they are perceived as having far more possessions than their peers.

To sum up, whether or not buying children a plenty of toys depends on what parents wanna give to their kids, either entertainment only or combine entertainment and study together. However, it's significant to select suitable toys to kids, but not just drop them playthings in bulk.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, apart from, such as, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10305343511 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8039601639 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648854961832 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9013382597 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.846153846 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252558445841 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798643520994 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041161765389 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136587493452 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199091394947 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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