Some parents give their children everything that their children ask for or they want to do. Is this good for children? What could be the consequences for these children when they grow up?
As people’s living standard increases, many parents try to provide everything that their offspring demand, which, however, will lead to severe negative consequences for their children in the future.
The first consequence I want to present is their lack of ability to concur setbacks when spoiled children enter the workplace. Their colleagues and managers are not able to take care of them as their parents, and thus they have to learn to complete tasks on their own. Along with that come many new challenges which might be tough for them, and as they experienced very few difficulties before, they may be not able to stand the frustration of failing to solve problems. As a result, it is very likely for those people to give up when they face setbacks.
In addition, children growing up under their parents’ protection will possibly fail to take their responsibilities. In childhood, they got everything from their parents without any effort, which results in the lack of motivation to strive for what they want. when they become adults, they will automatically find other people to do their work for them. consequently, they may not have a clear sense of responsibility since young, so it is difficult for them to take it.
those children might even be a threat to the society when they grow up. when spoiled children of arrogant temperament are treated in an unpleasant way, say punishment for inappropriate behaviors, it is highly likely for them to get angered and become rebellious. Further to that, because their parents were tolerant for their behavior regardless right or wrong, they became accustomed to ignoring rules and not being restricted by others. Laws and regulations will also have limited effects on them for the same reason, which is a potential threat to other members of society.
In conclusion, offering children everything they ask is by no means beneficial to them due do the possible negative consequences listed. Instead, parents can reward their children for good behavior and discourage them from bad one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25892857143 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85295917653 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565476190476 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5021810112 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.561052992655 0.244688304435 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203768766108 0.084324248473 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656199515724 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349104155153 0.151304729494 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504320413463 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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