Some parents think it is good to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

Some parents think it is good to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is sometimes argued that some families prefer to lend their kids cellphones. However, there are those who believe that this gadget might harmful to adolescents and it is too early to give them this technology. In my opinion, this is a necessary measure to be introduced. Firstly, this essay will discuss the possible damaging for their youngsters, and secondly, it will analyze the perspective benefits without these devices in too early age.

On the one hand, proponents of mobile phones believe that this gadget helps to their babies in the long run. This is because the profession of IT specialists is increasing every year, and their teenagers may improve their skills by using this device. As a result lack of adolescents will be professional in the IT-sphere with good experience at the past. However, this argument is flawed mainly because of non-useful materials in cellphones. A prime example is the school of Harvard, which give these phones to the kids from their being, as a result this school take the first place in the world.

On the other hand, opponents of this tool base their opinion on the assumption that cellphones might damage to the children’s eyesight and that the internet has many no need information and I agree that it is no good to give their teenagers mobile phones too early. This is because these gadgets may produce radiation with microwaves, which is harmful to kid’s vision, also these devices have not enough and bad information that claims for teenager’s degradation. As a result after the tiny period of time, the lack of children will be wearing glasses, also they will be spent lack of their time. For example, according to recent research of the University of Harvard, many parents who lend their kids cellphones, was spared due to their adolescents was wore a glasses and they had bad grades at school.

In conclusion, though people may vary in their opinions, I am firmly convinced that this gadget is a useful tool, but not too early. This is due to the fact that youngsters may worsen their eyesight, despite the benefits that they may take from cellphones.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rove their skills by using this device. As a result lack of adolescents will be pr...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'worn'.
Suggestion: worn
...was spared due to their adolescents was wore a glasses and they had bad grades at sc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95264623955 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71054257832 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49860724234 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4246717871 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.533333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15889830387 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570491266407 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049119543744 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990099953671 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416994374945 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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