In the past people often worked in their businesses until they died or were no longer able to
continue, whereas today most industries have set a definite retirement age for their employees. I
personally disagree that replacing elderly staff with young recruits would be unwise.
First and foremost, a large majority of workers lose their strength as they become older. This is
mainly because the human body has limits and working for a long time, say, 30 or 35 years, can
affect it negatively. For example, young industrial workers tend to work for five to six hours
before they take breaks while older ones usually need to rest every one or two hours. This means
that productivity levels would certainly decline.
Furthermore, new employment opportunities for young people are very limited. Most companies do
not offer more than a few new jobs every year and try not to increase their staff members
dramatically to keep expenses low. Consequently, they should definitely lay off some of the older
personnel to make room for youths, especially those around 20 to 30 years old who are about to
form families and support them. (69 words)
Finally, although some people might argue that the experience and skills of old workers would be
lost when they retire, they should remember that this experience is mostly with old or outdated
equipment and technologies. As a result, it is less likely that their employers will need their
abilities in the long run and younger workers can be trained to work with modern machines such
as computers and lasers.
In conclusion, I believe companies need to force their elderly workforce to retire and employ
younger workers to replace them.
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...r strength as they become older. This is mainly because the human body has limits...
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...r elderly workforce to retire and employ younger workers to replace them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, furthermore, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09964412811 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56921756862 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644128113879 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6990275053 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.416666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205578892164 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073965930395 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498022389612 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581539057295 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607804469676 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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