Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers
with new and young yet inexperienced individuals.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, almost every company tends to retires its employees once they have reached a certain
age. I completely agree with this practice and believe elderly staff need to be replaced with
younger workers despite the difference in their work experience.
First and foremost, a large majority of workers lose their strength as they become older. This is
mainly because the human body has limits, and working for a long time, say, 30 or 35 years, can
affect it negatively. For example, young industrial workers tend to work for five to six hours before
they take breaks while older ones usually need to rest every one or two hours. This means that
productivity levels would certainly decline.
Furthermore, new employment opportunities for young people are very limited. Most companies do
not offer more than a few new jobs every year and try not to increase their staff members
dramatically to keep expenses low. Consequently, they should definitely lay off some of the older
personnel to make room for younger ones, especially those around 20 to 30 years old who are
about to form families and support them.
Finally, the experience and skills of old workers is usually out of date. They might have a lot of
experience with old technology and machines, but their employers constantly need to upgrade their
equipment and methods. Therefore, it is less likely that old worker’s abilities are necessary in the
long run, and younger workers who know how to operate modern machines such as computers and
lasers can replace them.
In conclusion, I think companies need to force their elderly workforce to retire and employ
younger workers to replace them to improve productivity, have up-to-date workers and provide
jobs for young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'retire'.
Suggestion: retire
...Nowadays, almost every company tends to retires its employees once they have reached a ...
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Line 13, column 81, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...quently, they should definitely lay off some of the older personnel to make room for young...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20905923345 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65396833755 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637630662021 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8475469214 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.38176352705 479% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13240126406 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482626401558 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402892716801 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0394800896062 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045924990404 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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