Some people argue that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The habitat conditions of wildlife, particularly those endangered species have been significantly improved due to relentless efforts from animal protectionists. However, some people do not think it is wise to allocate too many resources to wildlife conservation.

It is easy to understand why people object to investing too much on animals. One the one hand, it is true that wild animals and birds of rare species are well protected in some developed countries where large natural preserves are well built and maintained. Tourists are more civilized and they show respect to the habitats of wild animals when visiting wetlands. Laws have been established to ban cruel abuse or murdering of animals and children learn to identify and rescue wild species from textbooks. On the other hand, there are still people starving and being deprived of basic sanitary conditions around the world. According to a recent report in US, among five children one goes to school without lunch every day and the country's free lunch plan for poverty-stricken children is in badly need of financial support. For many people, It is justified that people's wellbeing should be taken into consideration before animals are taken good care of.

However, it is not always the same case all around the world and wild animals are still being hunted and slaughtered inhumanely in many places. Although there are laws that forbid poaching rare animals for human consumption, endangered animals are still seen on dining table as gourmet dishes. Besides, as people's preference for leather products as fashion continues, each year hundreds of thousands of tigers and seals are shot to death and illegal profits are gained from fur trades. To some extent, as long as individual needs for products made from animals exist, brutal killing will not disappear and those animals will be at a risk. What is worse, wildlife habit is rapidly disappearing due to development and other human-caused changes. Considering all these factors, it is hard to say that too much has been done to protect wild animals.

In conclusion, I think preserving wild animals is necessary and calls for efforts from both governments and individual citizens. While progress has been made during the past decades to provide livable habitats for those endangered species, there is still a long way to go before we can live harmony with our wild neighbors.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, still, well, while, i think, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 13.1623246493 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16452442159 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74402779558 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573264781491 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8459796359 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.176470588 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241345349168 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798306600728 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689152409874 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14783636292 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570139583471 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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