Some people become famous when they are at a young age Do you think this is positive or negative

Essay topics:

Some people become famous when they are at a young age. Do you think this is positive or negative?

Nowadays, the majority youngsters are becoming popular quite early. When it comes to me, I definitely feel that this phenomenon is negative trend due to a huge number of reasons which I will discuss in essay.
Though there are several important points to make in support of my position, one of the core argument I would like to describe in this debate is that adolescents, probably, does not capable to deal with popularity when they are young. It is obvious that in teen ages everyone want to be the person who stands out in the crowd and try their best to be the one. Unfortunately, when youngsters become famous most of them are getting off from "the good path". For instance, in The New York Times it was reported in 2017 that eight-tenth of young YouTube bloggers are drug addicted, since they did not handle with popularity when it came.
Another aspect to be mentioned is that not only cannot teenagers deal with popularity, but also this trend has a crucial influence on their education. It is believed, that celebrities do not have a lot of time for self-confident and even for a life. Thus, adolescents do not have any university degree for a case in emergency. That is why they cannot be ripped off with popularity. For example, sociologists conducted a research in media sphere a fortnight ago and revealed that 60 per cent of youngsters who decided to become not popular anymore cannot get a well-paid or at least an interesting job further in their life.
To conclude, taking everything into account all I mean is that parents of such types teenagers should care for their education and surrounding to prevent any negative consequences.

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Average: 7.8 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, i mean

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8199078509 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618881118881 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2140655213 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.833333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194348416195 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613610931405 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308942961575 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101337983097 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524197161693 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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