Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
It is true that children are becoming independent from their parents and they ten to prefere make a decision on matters by themselves. While some people think that the permittion in making decision can create the selfish in children, I supposed that learning how to give the choices on matter that childern feel important for them play an vital role for their development.
There is a reason can expalain why allowing children to make their own choices on matters lead to a selfish child. Firstly, if children can choice by themselves on food, clothes and entertainment, they can easily lose the empathy with others. In other words, when they are given the right to choose which kind of foods or clothes they want to eat or wear, they will just focus on what they want and gradually ignore others' demand. As a results, in the future they might be become a person who only think about their own wishes. For example, my sister who was allowed to decision which kind of clothes she loves to wear. She choosed the luxury clothes and after that, she continued wearing that kìn clothes although he parents cannot afford for it.
I beleive that giving the choice on matters for childen beneficial in some ways. Firstly, a child was built the independent in making decsision in small things on everyday, it will help them give the choice with the future events that can affect their life. For instance, in Vietnam, everu students must decide what the university and major they want to pursue, hence if they are decisive person they will give the answer without hesitation. Secondly, the right to choose also bring them the independent life. More particular, when children make a decision not depend on other think or commment, they will have power to decide their life in the future. As a result, they have ability to control everything as they want and take responsinility for their decision.
In conclusion, despite of the freedom in choices can create a selfish soceity, it seems to me that children should be encouraged to give the independent decision on everydayt matters. to help them build the better life in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: To
...ependent decision on everydayt matters. to help them build the better life in the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80601092896 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46992873199 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505464480874 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3558111447 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.9375 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1875 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248908461113 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913344615937 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737424654746 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149841941676 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782792512421 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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