Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. To what extent do you agree to that?
How do you think children should spend their free time?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
It is important to make use of leisure time for the children. While many people argue that the perfect thing to achieve this objective via the engagement in educational activities. I believe that young people should do this in versatile ways besides their school. In this essay I will discuss both points of view.
Considering the vital role of educational entities, they are offering outstanding programs. The students are allowed to participate in scientific workshops that enrich them. Moreover, the other activities including: sports, arts, and music setups enable them to develop their competencies. Throughout these events, they acquire essential merits in term of collaboration and teamwork environment under the wise supervision of their mentors. However, if they were left in streets, they might have risky characteristics. Consequently, this young men will disappoint their families.
On the other hand, the social experiences are critical for our future youths. This is because, they could not gain these in a closed-community like schools. Furthermore, taking advantages of free time in society's activities is crucial in growing-up humanity manners in them. Correspondingly, young-aged people will consider empathy towards poor people and giving hands to needy ones. As well as, they will be able to deal with the actual life-challenges from their childhood.
In conclusion, in both perspectives, leisure time is very essential in widening the mindset of children. School-related activities are fundamental in particular aspects, However, the surrounding community is the dominant. Thus, the balance in investing in free time is the only path to arise efficient individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in particular, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67450980392 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21820561282 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4409088352 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.3888888889 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1666666667 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252434959751 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679114862001 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067320495993 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14746394419 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694033570889 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.01 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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