In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
In recent years, the attitude of work abroad between two educational stages has demonstrated vastly. While some people believe in importance of this step, the other ones argue about it. In this essay, I will explore both positives and negatives of this issue.
It is clear that traveling and labor in early age have owed excel benefits towards the youths. Considering, the persons acquire very essential value, as they possess high self-confidence and the ability to deal with variety of problems. Moreover, having a job in a different country will enable them to appreciate the hard work and being adaptable in a diverse cultures. For instance, one of my relatives had begun to work in a very young age ,he has learnt a lot of tiers business, nowadays, he is one of the prominent businessmen in his field thanks to early experiences that he had absorbed.
On the other hand, numerous drawbacks come with the premature work. One of them that many students fascinated with practical side rather than scientific side, thus this affected on their study frustratingly. Moreover, some of young men are deeply engaged in other countries' culture, as a consequence, they are detached from their homelands and families, they might be isolated from their own identity too. For example, a man who has grown up in a poor region would definitely escape from this tough circumstances and would take advantages of traveling to start a new life regardless his education.
In conclusion, the favors of traveling and working in pre-university stage are outweighing the disadvantages, however, many of teenagers would not achieve the main objectives for this. Furthermore, the guidance from the families and teachers must be taken into consideration in order to guarantee the maximum benefits from this experience, thus this reflects positively on future of individuals.
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Suggestion: culture
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20265780731 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97098770049 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63122923588 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8250433706 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.461538462 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194950504295 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586871296357 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439463206063 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109306149171 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014869750014 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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