I DISAGREE
Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many
different teams who plays this football. There are dividing into 3 division: division one,
division two and division three. Each divisions have different skills. The skills that they have
are depend on the manager. He is the one who teachs the player how to play. By playing
football, there are many advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, the team can earn a lot of
money. If we compare the income in division one and division two are really different. The
division one will get more than division two. Because as we know, the team in division one,
they shows to the people that they are able to play better than the others. For example:
David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can earn for about £45.000
£50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about
£11O.OOO/year. Secondly, they can get a lot of spectators which makes the income
increased. In one match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s
really high. For one ticket (VIP) it can cost us a lot of money. I think for about £100 or over.
That is for one person. How if we count for a million person? There are also many
disadvantages: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe
way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans
of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them
flowers and also the clothes which shown they’re sad about that.
There are other sport games like tennis. Tennis is also popular. In playing tennis there
are also have advantages and disadvantages. This games shows how they against each
other. The advantages are can earn a lot of money, can attract the spectators (audience).
There are also have disadvantages of this games, for example: two years ago, when
Monica Sales and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each other then, one of
the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots) Monica Sales. That makes Monica
Sales have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital.
Because of that, it makes Monica Sales stopped from playing tennis for about a year. But
now, she has started again.
In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and also can make
death from year to year become increase. So, it is very dangerous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ame in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays this football. There ar...
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Line 4, column 34, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
... one, division two and division three. Each divisions have different skills. The sk...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...rent skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the one wh...
^^^
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the one who teach...
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Line 9, column 6, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
...e know, the team in division one, they shows to the people that they are able to pla...
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Line 16, column 84, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a safe way" with adverb for "safe"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don't really agree ab...
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Line 22, column 10, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...ular. In playing tennis there are also have advantages and disadvantages. This game...
^^^^
Line 23, column 68, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'spectators'' or 'spectator's'?
Suggestion: spectators'; spectator's
...an earn a lot of money, can attract the spectators audience. There are also have disadvan...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 24, column 16, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...he spectators audience. There are also have disadvantages of this games, for exampl...
^^^^
Line 24, column 38, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
.... There are also have disadvantages of this games, for example: two years ago, when...
^^^^
Line 25, column 72, Rule ID: OTHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'other than'?
Suggestion: other than
...re on the match. They play against each other then, one of the Steffi's fan can&apos...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81922196796 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51835628025 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485125858124 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 16.0721442886 236% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5760876244 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 55.4210526316 106.682146367 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.5 20.7667163134 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.94736842105 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 3.4128256513 469% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0487777111604 0.244688304435 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0126803885664 0.084324248473 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237243661482 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0146767320671 0.151304729494 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246162241427 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 13.0946893788 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 50.2224549098 154% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.49 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 9.78957915832 41% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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