Some people believe that children's time outside should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. Others feel that children need free time to play and relax.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is considered by many that formal classes or physical activities should fill the children's time outside of school. However, other people support the opinion that free time should be used by kids just to play and relax. From my point of view, time to rest the mind is actually necessary to everyone, but specially to children. The purpose of this essay is to discuss both approaches and to point out our opinion about the topic.
On the one hand, an agenda which is filled with classes full-time offers the benefity to develop many skills. For this reason, pupils could have the opportunity to learn a new language, for instance, which could be very usefull for them, mainly in their future. This free time could be also used to improve a sort of abilities, as well as some phisical activities such as football and swimming, for example.
On the other hand, kids need leisure time to rest and to play with other kids. Otherwise, they will spend the whole childhood with duties. Resting it is extremelly important, even to adults. Many times we spend so many time just working that we just forgot to live. Moreover, free time is a way to develop other skills in a informal way. To illustrate, we could mention criativity, for example. This is why children need time without any kind of arangement or obligation, they already have that in the school.
To summarize, we could say that some people consider that kid's time outside of school should be occupied with activities like art and music classes or sports, for example. Others believe that children need spare time to rest and play. In conclusion, considering both approaches, I tend to believe that free time is extremely necessary as part of childhood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80405405405 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49421353712 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4502047744 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6470588235 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427777535702 0.244688304435 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138376906906 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101492250049 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284211001837 0.151304729494 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121373337837 0.056905535591 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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