Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed for some that students should be obligated to develop unpaid activities during the High School as part of their curriculum. However, I tend to desagree with this approach. The purpose of this essay is discuss that position and gives another possibility to manage the issue.
On the one hand, social and community services give to students the opportunity to develop skills and abilities, which could be extremely relevant for theis careers in the future. Moreover, this kind of activity give them notions of humanity as empaty, for example. Nowadays, empaty is fundamental to live in a better society. Another positive aspect provided for that experience is the responsability. Responsability is a competence to be improved during this period of life. On the other hand, I support the oppinion that the unpaid community service should not be a duty, but an option. For this reason, community services should be an altervative for students who see the benefits mentioned above and want to do that as a voluntary work.
In Brazil, the majority of the community services are developed by unpaid organizations and it is not a compulsory part of high school. The purposes of the services vary. For instance, some people work to improve the enviroment with recycle programs. Anothers examples to mention are projects related to education. In this case, the tasks performed could be teaching poor children or people from other countries, often refugees, who need help to learn Portuguese and improve their lives in Brazil.
In conclusion, unpaid community services such as working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children should be offered by the school system as voluntaries activities. In addition, the role to develop this sort of service should be developed by the government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...chool system as voluntaries activities. In addition, the role to develop this sort...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21283783784 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89349972669 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537162162162 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.931065132 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7647058824 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421999903656 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125602433286 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113284489105 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271483912249 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649248367471 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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