Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both
views and give your own opinion.
It is widely believed that social problems lead to the increase of criminal rate in community. However, others stress that bad intended characteristics is the main reason why people become offenders. In this essay, I will discuss both view of this statement.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why crime is a result of detrimental thinking and activities of one person. The way they think would reflect how they are. If someone want to have a wealthy life, they would make an effort to enhance their income through any legal solutions. For crimes, however, in that case, what only they could think is robber or purchasing illegal items. They had many ways to choose but they made an unwise decision.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that social issues and poverty are the main reason cause the appearance of offenders. It can be denied that
surrounding environment has an enormous affect on the way people think and do. If a children live in a high-standard environment and interact with good friends every day, they would become a well- educated citizens. In contrast, it is unsurprising when a child who lives in a slum and plays with naughty friends become a thief or a robber. The key factor in this case is that when people see social problems day-by-day, they would be consider these activities as normal things. Therefore, they could be imitate these wrong activities and become offenders.
In conclusion, despite of their bad individual’s nature, I still believe that the problems of community is the main cause of crime.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... would reflect how they are. If someone want to have a wealthy life, they would make...
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Line 6, column 41, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...surrounding environment has an enormous affect on the way people think and do. If a child...
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Line 6, column 83, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...fect on the way people think and do. If a children live in a high-standard environment and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1298.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89811320755 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70475235415 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57358490566 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6232228949 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.5333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202238856727 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656462453093 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619083445076 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121063198948 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497591879986 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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