Some people believe that family has greater influence in child's development otter believe that otter influences ( music, friends, tv) has greater influence.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There is no doubt tht family's upbringing has a great importance among communities. However, tere are particular means can impact on children's behaviour cosiderably. In general, in this essay i will discuss both sides before arriving at a conclusion.
To begin with, allows me to present a positive side for family's role to develop children. This means family plays rootly role in growing their kids in various fields such as languge , religion, principles and life's values. To illustrate, My name is Manal, I am from Saudi Arabia I am muslim. So, all these things my family played a vital role to choose it. By contrast, I have friend from Turkey, she speaks Turkish and she is also Musilm. When i recognized her before couple years in San Francisco, she impacted littly on me in some habits such as loving Italian food and listening to favourite English songes which i haterd before. From that, family is responsible considerably for child's development because it has a choice to choose main roots that shape his personalityand his creed. As a consequence of that, family is an important element for building kid's character.
On the other hand,sometimes there are other factors that influence directly on child. In other words, if children spend their time in front of TV or on heldhand devices, they ofcourse will impact on their speaking and some their attitude. For instance, the nature of child is quiet in the first 3 years, in most Arabic cultures, but this is changed when they entered a nursery or a school. This is often happened because they meet new friends who have different habites and life. So, they become more boold , active and social with other kids tat have a huge effect on development. Clearly, it is noticeable that improving children is not a choice, but it is necessarly.
To sum up, in my opinion i strongly believe that family especially parents have a nemurose influence on kids through essential things which create his identify, and become roots of tree as religion ( caste or creed) and principles that can not change it throughout his life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for instance, in general, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90909090909 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70756485904 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610795454545 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9267349491 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113921852659 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311177993969 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312220615334 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684917566425 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206004826117 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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