Some people say that family is the most powerful influence a child's development. Others' say that other factors such as television, friends and music play a greater role today.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is no doubt that family has a great importance in raising child. However, sometimes there are some reasons which impact significantly on children. In general, in this essay I will discuss both sides before arriving at a conclusion.
To begin with, allows me to present a positive side of family influence on kids which consider a fundamental rock through language, religion, principles and daily value. This means a kid starts to learn talking by their parents and their family. So he of course will talk the same language automatically. For example, in my personal life, I am a Muslim and I speak Arabic from my childhood. So, this came not a choice, but it is a part of my identity that my family learned me as an essentail need. As a consequence of that, there are essential aspects considerably in various levels.
In other words, if travel abroad, it is hard to recognize tourist from any countries. This occurs because they wear the same style jeans and teshirt. To illustrate, professional players such as Christino Ronaldo is the best player in the world. Most kids take him as a role model. Because they love him, it notices that they cut their hairs like him. From that, media means often play s vital role to effect in childrens' style or music as well. Clearly, external environment such as TV and friends may effect on kids especially in their style life.
To sum up. In my opinion, I strongly believe that parents are a strong and influenced factor on children because they live and spend long time with them. So, they can become under supervision which notice them directly even becoming the best generation that serves their socities in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to talk'.
Suggestion: to talk
...alue. This means a kid starts to learn talking by their parents and their family. So h...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... environment such as TV and friends may effect on kids especially in their style life....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in general, no doubt, of course, such as, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79655172414 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62259685593 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648275862069 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6604485394 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.2105263158 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1071327962 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295745554368 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289216664692 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617261095575 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294403645351 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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