Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
It is argued that well-known people's involvements in global aid organizations attract the attention of the community. While some people suppose that their participation may downplay the significance of problems, I would argue that this trend could bring about enormous and positive changes to society.
On the one hand, famous people can lessen the importance of problems. One reason is that most people often consider the main purpose of celebrities' support as a way to enhance their reputations. in an effort to attract the attention of society, a number of important people try to be involved in as many volunteer projects as possible without any particular passion or interest in those. Furthermore, the association with celebrities may trivialize the serious work of international aid organizations since the focus of the public may be shifted away from this endeavour to the fame and public image of the celebrity concerned. Consequently, we sometimes have to question their motives for involvement.
on the other hand, I strongly believe that celebrities can bring meaningful changes to social activities. Firstly, they have a huge number of fans who are inspired by their actions. For example, when My Tam- a Vietnamese legendary singer- took part in the project to help underprivileged children in mountainous areas, thousands of youngsters from her fan club joined in this project by donating money and working as volunteer thanks to her encouragements. Secondly, celebrities are often trusted by both local and international communities, which may lead to succeed in raising the profile of aid organizations. As a result, more people learn about projects and donate money or volunteer to help either practically or in fund-raising.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks to celebrity participation in international aid organizations, it seems to me that it is more advantageous for the community that they take part in voluntary activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42345276873 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28090167511 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57328990228 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.051846603 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.076923077 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1538461538 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222986128293 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787514589301 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052239984847 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131824957306 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393904211779 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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