Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development. However, others think the social value is lost as a result of economic development. To what extent do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh its disadvantages?
It is true that economic advancement plays as a tool to enhance the living quality in almost all of the countries. While many people argue that economic development places considerable negative effects on our social values, I believe that its benefits are outweighed.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that the economic upsurge has partly changed the society in a negative way. Indeed, economic development creates a hustle and bustle pace of life which requires people to work hard and play less to keep up with such rat race. For example, parents have a tendency to spend more time working instead of playing and taking care of their children, while people under money pressure become indifferent to each other. In addition, the changing in infrastructure is as a result of economic development which has strong impacts on the traditional values. Vietnam is an illustration of this argument when many historical buildings have been replaced by the skyscraper.
On the other hand, there are unaccountable advantages that economic development brings to our life. Firstly, economic development contributes to lower the unemployment rate. In fact, the more job offers, the happier people are since they can easily earn money to afford their daily essential or even a luxury lifestyle. Secondly, the education and healthcare system also take the advance. The raising in revenue allows the government to invest more to improve the public services which directly benefit citizens. For instance, patients have a chance to access to high-quality health treatments with reasonable price, while students can study in a modern classroom with the well-trained teachers.
In conclusion, it can be said that although some drawbacks exist, the benefits of economic development are still far away and it stands to a reason for an unstoppable improvement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... upsurge has partly changed the society in a negative way. Indeed, economic development creates a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27210884354 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9121923794 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622448979592 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.192794412 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.714285714 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7857142857 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190643199371 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720785130438 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642651103429 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120069021948 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342247890177 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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