Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, people organize a variety of funds to help the needy. Some encourage the support of celebrities; whereas the rest oppose that it results in the less necessary of the problems. In this essay, I will attempt to justify both viewpoints as well as provide my perspective that basically supports the former.
On the one hand, many stars could help the aid organizations gain more money by gaining popularity from the community. To explain, they tend to be the people that receive a wide range of attention from the ordinary because they, in likelihood, often join some shows aired on the TV. Added to that, some people may suspect the information of those charities given by one who is normal, but they are likely to trust the famous one who has a really good reputation. As a result, when those prominent figures call for the people's help, they can receive a large amount of support.
On the other hand, the meaning of the charity might disappear if it gets the stars' intervention. Some fans might imitate the celebrities to raise money because they, in likelihood, want to improve the prevalence of their idols. However, it is a doubt that many of them do not know the main purpose of the appeal that is to help the people in need. Those people are likely to be indifferent with the surrounding people, with the community in general.
All in all, the merit of stars' support surpasses the negative one. If people sympathize with the needy, the community will become better and better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stars'' or 'star's'?
Suggestion: stars'; star's
... charity might disappear if it gets the stars intervention. Some fans might imitate t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, really, so, well, whereas, in general, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58253121097 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580769230769 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3481431749 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3846153846 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187584843672 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06297279016 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236751319086 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108061843325 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031086067877 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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