Some people believe famous people s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems while others think celebrities make the problems less important Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, people organize a variety of funds to help the needy. Some encourage the support of celebrities; whereas the rest oppose that it results in the less necessary of the problems. In this essay, I will attempt to justify both viewpoints as well as provide my perspective that basically supports the former.
On the one hand, many stars could help the aid organizations gain more money. To explain, they tend to be the people that receive a wide range of attention from the ordinary. Some people may suspect the information of these charities given by one who is normal, but they are likely to trust the famous one who has a really good reputation. Moreover, some fans of many well-known people may respond positively and strongly to the appeal of raising money because those people might want their idol's reputation to become better.
On the other hand, some fans might imitate the celebrities to raise money and ignore the real purpose of a charity. As it has been said, they may just want to improve the prevalence of their idol. Added to that, some people, in likelihood, raise money to make an impressive view to the surrounding people. Those people may not care for the disadvantaged people. Hence, the meaning of the charity might disappear.
All in all, the merit of stars' support surpasses the negative one. If people sympathize with the needy, the community will become better and better.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...will attempt to justify both viewpoints as well as provide my perspective that basically s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, whereas, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1169.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87083333333 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58090948117 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7951843214 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206403021308 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645793720735 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033438404772 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1149697886 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350467328056 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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