Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

There are many different views toward the effectiveness of the well-known person, who involves in global aid organizations, in attracting community attention. While some people believe that celebrities may downplay the significance of issues, I would argue that they play an important role in making enormous and positive changes in the society.

On the one hand, it is reasonable to argue that famous people place negative impacts on social problems in some extents. Firstly, instead of paying focuses on the crucial of problems, people have a tendency to spend their attention on the celebrity appearances, who are their idol. Secondly, it is worth to question for their motives in joining in such social events. Indeed, many well-known persons enroll in volunteer projects just to enhance their reputations without enthusiastic or exciting feelings.

On the other hand, it seems to me that famous stars exert great effects on social problems. The famous persons, who with huge numbers of fan members and great influences into the community, can help to widen the recognition of the issues. More importantly, they can contribute to solving the problems in a quick and effective way. For instance, a famous MC in Vietnam named Phan Anh, he was very successful in calling for financial donations, which were used to help farmers, who suffered from the historical flood in the central areas of Vietnam in 2017. In fact, there are many celebrities who considered charitable actions as a priority part of their social life and they truly work with their sweetheart. Additionally, by using the images of famous persons as supporters, aid organizations have opportunities to build up their reliable profile which allows them to easily access the financial sources from institutions and enterprises.

In a nutshell, although there are negative impacts existed, I believe that celebrities are helpful for international aid organizations in many positive ways.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35598705502 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96919173145 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588996763754 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4175987298 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.307692308 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195089634434 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671899832662 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542812079148 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127459955471 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295871654807 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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