In life, people will definitely face a great deal of challenges. Some people may just accept those hardships, while others will struggle to improve the situations. In my opinion, it is better that people should strive to change their undesirable conditions.
When facing hardships, some people have a tendency to accept those situations. This is because, they are not ready to face the risks. For the example, an employee with low wages actually has an option to quit from his current job. On the contrary, this is a very unsafe option for someone with high debts like him. If he quits his current job, he will be unemployed for some period of time; therefore, he will not receive any money, which will only hamper him from clearing all of his debts. It is obvious that some people's striving for changes will only result in exacerbated conditions.
On the other hand, other people will react differently towards difficult circumstances. The reason for this is they have strong will to make things better. To illustrate, my grand father did not have any capital at all to start his own business at first. He then borrowed some money to buy equipment and rice to be sold. He was not afraid to face the risk that he would not be able to pay the loan. As a result, he finally succeeded in building his own business. If he had not dared to take the risks, he would not have been able to start his own business.
In conclusion, some people tend to take no action toward difficult situations, while others will always attempt to change the conditions. Personally, people should take necessary actions to improve those circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ent job, he will be unemployed for some period of time and not receiving any money, which will...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... financial free in a young age. He then choose to quit and started to open his own bus...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...n entrepreneur. His business is finally succeed and he can achieve his dream in a very ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, may, so, then, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80456026059 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56648587135 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514657980456 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9908075032 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7647058824 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132924968657 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530286557904 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498639714201 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089772245883 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340400993983 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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