Some people believe that money brings happiness; others are of the opinion that having too much money is a problem. Discuss both views and give your own
opinion.
Since money was perceived a main tool of exchange economy, it has gradually become a benchmark for the quality of life. So, it is unsurprising that the majority of people have a strong faith in happiness that is brought by money. However, there still exists some counterarguments that more money one person has, more problems his life will be faced with. In this essay, both sides of this issue will be discussed thoroughly.
Admittedly, having as much money as possible firmly leads to a life full of amenities, convenience and even comfortability that all are attributed to happiness. It can be understandable that when getting into an independent life, a person will inevitably encounter financial issues. To overcome those problems, you must spend more time on working arduously with the purpose of earning as much money as possible for buying a good house and ensuring your life more nutritious and warmer. Otherwise, people those who are less hard-working and less determined at all times can experience the feeling of being unhappy because of their material-lacking lives.
On the other hand, to a certain degree, owing a host of money may cause some dilemmas unexpectedly. The line of reasoning lies in the fact that getting all thoughts into using money can result in stress and even can affect the social relationship with other people. Practically, a person who are always bothered by his money may ruin his life mentally through bringing negative emotions into it instead of being open-minded with its interesting aspects. For example, I have witnessed the severe debate between a wife and her husband about his job not being well-paid like others. As a result, there came to their divorce despite the fact that they have had a beautiful love worth dreaming.
From my experience and knowledge, I am of the opinion that money have not lost its importance in people’s lives; but by considering it as one of a thousand methods in seeking happiness, our life can avoid being complicated and stressed by financial issues regardless of whether or not we are rich.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down by saying that our life still has more things to explore in the future. If you are a person caring about your happiness, you will recognize that besides, the moments of being with your friends or parents or children can be inseparable parts of your happiness that can just be achieved once in your life not like your money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...essed by financial issues regardless of whether or not we are rich. To put it in a nutshell, ...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... once in your life not like your money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, so, still, well, for example, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89130434783 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80514246399 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553140096618 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3922284534 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5625 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23773221717 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763728896234 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533973442705 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133034676535 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336751026609 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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