We can see more disasters and violence shown on TV .What are its causes and what effects will they exert on the individual and the society?
These days, it is not hard for us to encounter the news about catastrophic and violent events on the Tv like family violence, school bullying, the gathering of protesters on the main streets, highway accidents, social crimes. That may cause adverse impact on the stability of the whole society and the private life of each inhabitant in it. In this essay, causes about the popularity of that kind of the news on the Tv and its influence on the individual and the society will be discussed.
It is unarguable that proper education is only a key tool to shape socially righteous attitudes towards building more civilized societies. In a sense, people who are less-educated are inclined to behave badly and even, can lead to the disorder of the society by intending to be quarrelsome with other people immorally. For example, recently there have been an increasing number of videos about severely brutal fighting between car drivers just because of unexpectedly small accidents on highways. In other cases, some businessmen, because of benefit-related pressure caused their counterparts, have used local mafias to help them disturb the selling activities of their opponents.
Besides, foreign violent cultures from various countries being introduced deeply into our national culture have influenced strongly on the young’s behavior and thought. In particular, the idolization of celebrities or well-known actors in violent action-related blockbusters makes the majority of the young imitate their idols’ gestures in reality when getting into troubles. For instance, instead of solving social problems verbally, the young have the tendency to knock down others if they get upset and disrespected.
If not being solved by particular measures, those above-mentioned causes can deform the ideology of the whole society that may destabilize it over time by immoral and violent factors. Further, a less-civilized country are not more attractive to big foreign investors that can delay the extensive development of its economy in the future. Last but not least, the increase in the number of social criminals can generate the long-term disorder of the whole society and to overcome this issue, the intervention of national armed forces is inevitable.
To sum up, there have still more reasons that causes disasters and violence shown on the TV. To limit unexpected outcomes that they cause, the authorities of local area should take care of what must be made to develop appropriately the education of mindset and ideology towards creating more sustainably civilized society in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, may, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, in particular, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35049019608 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94127348696 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595588235294 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.7784978209 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.533333333 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226265234897 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723180183529 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748316439229 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121062592102 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084125839902 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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