Some people believe that national sport teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government Others think they should be funded by non government ways such as business scholarship What is yo

In recent times there has been a phonomenon of the heated debate on the issue of who should provise the athletes with financial aid . Whereas some people are inclined to the view that the government should take charge of it, others are opposed to this viewpoint insisting on the fund of of non-governmental organizations. However, I hold a strong conviction that both of them are equally paramount for the satisfactory progress of sportsmen.
On the one hand, national sportsteams are often perceived as the pride of a country which means indegeous people feel contended and burst with pride when those athletes make headway. Contrastly, involvment of privately-run companies might result in commercialising them damaging the image of the nation. Futhermore, the victory of them irrefutably unites residents leading on valuable contribution to close-knit community. Hence, who should take care of them is the authorities.
On the other hand, monetary values backed by private sectors is of the essence in this statement due to the government's plethora of allocations to other fields such as education system and health care services. That is to say, presence of them would alleviate the political figures' burden supplying sports centres with better equipment, top-class facilities, nutrition as well as training methods. Obviously, the perfomance of sports teams is believed to be boosted with the help of them.
To recapitulate, the mere support of state-run organizations is not sufficient in essence. The aid of privately owned businesses who are eligible to put up finance, can fulfil sportspeople's potential.

Votes
Average: 7 (6 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, so, well, whereas, such as, as well as, on the other hand, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4126984127 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15277293675 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646825396825 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6021441991 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214885597349 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670035355762 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634225964651 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108150733206 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559202351645 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.32 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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