While some people believe that intelligence is determine by the cleverness of their parents, others insist that intelligence can be acquired through learning. This essay will discuss the both points of view and also provide my own perspective.
On the one hand, intelligence is innate. Gens are one of the factors that determine someone brilliance. There was a research found that mother’s RNA plays an important role in their child intelligence rather than father’s genes. It is because mother has twice chromosomes X while father only have one. For example, Sekala, the child of artist and singer Ayudia Bing Slamet and musician Ditto percussion already had seen inheriting his parent’s talent in singing and playing music instrument since he was 4 years old.
On the other hand, even though genes make contribution, but still do not guarantee the children’s intelligence. If the kids did not evolve the talents they get from their parents, everything is not valuable. Nowadays people who have passion and high desire can achieve whatever they want including the cleverness. Many cases show that profuse people can achieve higher education by working hard even though they have uneducated parents. This instance refutes the opinion of people who have faith in intelligence rising from the genes of their parents.
To sum this up, intelligence is not only something that retrieved from the inheritance of parents, but also can be acquired through effort. I am on the side of people who believe that hardworking is the factor that responsible for someone intelligence.
- The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). 78
- The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions 67
- The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'determined'.
Suggestion: determined
...ome people believe that intelligence is determine by the cleverness of their parents, oth...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...responsible for someone intelligence.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33201581028 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92577702943 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628458498024 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5129032033 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3571428571 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326169216824 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103598116909 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804349068377 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198908648608 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562023599326 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.