Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is a moot issue whether hobby classes should be mandatory part of school curriculum or not. Finding an answer to this debate is not a walk in the park.
To set the wheels in motion, hobby classes play a vital role in holistic development of children. If children attend hobby classes, it will broaden the horizons of their knowledge. It will identify their hidden. They can adopt it as career. Apart from this, in the age of neck and neck competition, the youngsters are bored with their regular studies. Without a shadow of doubt, hobby classes lend colour to their monotonous life.
Besides, attending hobby classes also help children to hone their motor skills when young ones practice in hobby classes through paper cutting, stitching, gardening etc. They get into the habit of doing fine work. What is more, it is often seen that there is discipline environment in science, math and history classes. Due to this, children are unable to relate with each other. However, hobby classes provide relaxed environment for children to mix with each other.
On the flip side, every rose has a thorn. The hobby classes have a dark side also.Hobby classes distract the children from their academic subjects.They waste their precious time in these classes that gives birth to poor academic performance. Last but not least, the young ones are already buried under the weight of voluminous syllabus. Adding an extra subject will mount more stress on them.
In compendium, after pondering over the preceding information it is felt that hobby classes have both merits and demerits but merits of hobby classes outnumber the demerits. Therefore, it is better for students to attend hobby classes .

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, apart from, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01779359431 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4909574405 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612099644128 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.918801788 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.2105263158 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0983192567708 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348232044862 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02455103402 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560591236415 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319828425709 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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