Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today’s society, people hold various views as to whether teenagers will be more successful if they jump straight into a job or continue attending university or college after school. Whereas there are persuasive arguments to the contrary, it is my personal belief that students will benefit from receiving a higher education.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why starting work straight after school is considered crucial. Firstly, it allows teenagers to earn money on their own. Accordingly, this makes them live more independently without the aid of parents’ financial support. Secondly, in terms of job prospect, teenagers are early exposed to practical skills related to their chosen occupation and thus have the chance to gain knowledge or learn from real experience. This, as a result, leads to good promotion opportunities as well as a fulfilling job for them in later life.
On the other hand, I agree with those who believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies. To embark on, academic qualifications are now required in various professions. For instance, it is almost impossible to have careers in fields such as medicine, education without meeting the relevant requirements. Therefore, those with a sufficient education stand a higher chance of having access to better job opportunity and they also seem to earn a higher salary compared to those who fail to fulfill the qualifications. Furthermore, the job market nowadays has become increasingly competitive, meaning that there are hundreds of candidates applying for a certain post in the company. In other words, young people that do not obtain a degree from university or college will find it difficult to be offered a job.
By way of conclusion, although there are some compelling reasons to claim that having a career after school is better for students, I reaffirm my state that they are more likely to be successful in their profession if they continue their education beyond school level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as to, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19135802469 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.926212415 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577160493827 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7981453582 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8571428571 7.06120827912 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189932571676 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563578776006 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632753849614 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115642147853 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365008554354 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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